When I Was a Child

Your lyrics have a warm, reflective tone and a clear emotional arc from childhood curiosity to appreciation of simple memories. The imagery is relatable and grounded, especially lines like “Some bread, a tiny bed, / And dreams inside my head.” The rhyme scheme is consistent and gives it a gentle acoustic or folk-pop feel. A few strengths: Strong nostalgia and sincerity Simple language that feels authentic Clear structure with verse / pre-chorus / chorus flow Emotional accessibility without overcomplicating the message A few areas you could strengthen: Add more vivid sensory details to make memories feel even more alive Tighten a few repeated ideas (“I wanted to be glad” could be more distinctive) Increase contrast between childhood innocence and adult reflection for deeper impact Here’s a polished version that keeps your meaning while improving flow and imagery slightly: