I Read a Subscriber's College Essay (3 Major Problems)

📄 Submit your essay for review (selected essays featured in future videos): https://forms.gle/cijxfcU1Eam66sTR8 In this video, I review a real college admissions essay draft submitted by a student and explain what works, what doesn't, and how I would improve it using my Three E's framework: • Engagement – Does the essay make me want to keep reading? • Engineering – How well is the story constructed? • Execution – How well is it written at the sentence level? ⏱️ Chapters 00:00 - Intro 00:39 - The Three E's 01:25 - Reading the Essay 19:44 - Final Verdict 20:44 - How to Submit Your Essay A little about me: I attended Dartmouth College and have spent years helping students with their college essays free of charge. This video series is an extension of that work. Rather than providing feedback one student at a time, I'm sharing these reviews publicly so that hundreds of students can learn from each essay. 📄 Submit your essay for review (selected essays featured in future videos): https://forms.gle/cijxfcU1Eam66sTR8 Please remove any identifying or sensitive information before submitting. I can't promise I'll review every essay, but I'll be selecting a small number of submissions for future videos. If you'd like feedback on your essay, I'd encourage you to submit it sooner rather than later. The essay reviewed in this video has been anonymized to protect the student's privacy and is shared with the student's permission. If you found this helpful, consider subscribing for more college essay reviews and writing tips. #CollegeEssay #CollegeAdmissions #CommonApp #EssayReview